Saturday, April 25, 2009

The Shepherd Sample


Camden has just informed me that there may be something wrong with the link I posted. So I'll just copy and paste the prologue and first chapter of my book into a post. Here it is...


The night sky was perfectly black, void of the moon and stars. Deep shadows shrouded the mountain cliffs and valleys. No owls hooted, no crickets chirped, and no monsters stirred-only an eerie silence, as though nature itself was in a somber mood. Mystery hung in the air like a subtle, foreboding mist, whispering to the deepest corners of the nearby villagers’ hearts that something terrible had happened.

The craggy mountain pass was motionless save for one figure hastily climbing and scurrying his way up the slope. His swishing, black cloak made him appear nothing more than a hint of a shadow. At the same time this garb marked him instantly as a member of the infamous Marauders. A large bulge lay cradled against his body, hidden beneath his cloak.

He wheezed and gasped as he fled up the slope, cursing the thin mountain air. His feet stumbled blindly over tree roots, rocks and bushes. His staccato breaths and scrambled steps intruded on the night’s stillness like an impudent funeral guest, making him feel like the only living being on Earth. But he knew he wasn’t alone.

With an anxious backward glance he pounded harder. The extra speed, however, only caused him to stumble more frequently. So this was what fear felt like.

He heard his feet splash below him for several steps and stopped. Cold water seeped into his boots and bit his ankles. A single flash of lightning cracked up the night sky behind him. For a split second he found himself staring down at his reflection in the lake-the panicked, pale face, the long nose and the two narrow streaks of silvery hair; the features of the cold-hearted murderer, Isaac Ganthorn.

He turned and ran from the image, but a tree root snared his foot and sent him rolling in a tangle of billowing, black cloth. He slammed into the dew-covered ground, and the parcel rolled out of his grasp. It let out a short, distressed cry with each bump.

“Hush!” Isaac pleaded, crawling frantically forward with another backward glance at the unrevealing blackness behind him. He looked down at the blanket wrapped infant before him, and felt the urge to leave it as it sat, to be rid of the burden it had proved to be. But even as the thought crossed his mind, he knew he couldn’t. The consequences would be terrible.

Pull yourself together, Ganthorn! He urged himself, frightened by his own panicked manner.

Breathing heavily, he picked up the package and rose once again into a run. Deliver the infant, and this will all be over, he attempted to convince himself.

At the top of the next hill, the Marauder caught a whiff of sulfur, and felt the warm mists of a nearby hot spring waft over him.

“Almost there,” he whispered. He snuck into the village nestled in an obscure crevice between two mountains. Slowing down as much as he dared, he crept stealthily between the houses and huts. None of the windows were illuminated by the glow of a light; it was much too late for honest folk to be awake. Feeling his way along the buildings, he arrived at a particularly rich, if unkempt house at the farthest end of the village. Unlike the other houses, this one did have the faint glow of light revealing the window frames, waiting for him like a lighthouse beacon after a long voyage. A black curtain hanging in one of the windows confirmed that this house was the one he sought.

Stepping as silently as possible, he dropped the baby at the doorstep. For a brief moment his eyes met those of the child, staring innocently up at him with fearful curiosity. The sincerity in the noiseless child’s eyes was chilling, and in that instant the image was etched in Isaac’s mind forever. Turning his head away abruptly, Isaac stole away and disappeared into the darkness. The night swallowed him as seamlessly as a serene lake absorbing a raindrop.

Not an instant passed before the door of the house opened a crack, and a glaring eye peered outward and down at the bundle on the steps. The door creaked fully open, releasing a flood of light and revealing the large, wide figure of Grixxler. The shadowy light highlighted his hairy upper lip, his balding dome, and his sneering countenance.

Grixxler looked directly at the patch of blackness through which Isaac had disappeared, scanned the surroundings suspiciously, and then snatched the baby up and closed the door.

Inside, the house was lavishly furnished, the works of a true craftsman on display. Exotic quilts lined the wooden floors; books filled the numerous shelves; the table was inlayed with slate. The light glowing from Grixxler’s lantern saturated the room with a warm, golden touch.

Grixxler held the loaf-sized child an awkward distance away from himself, studying it. Why did I ever get involved with those confounded Marauders? Grixxler plagued himself for the umpteenth time. He noticed a small piece of crumpled paper stashed inside the baby’s blanket. Setting him down on the table, Grixxler unfolded the message and read it silently.

“Ganthorn,” he breathed as his eyes scanned the rushed, scrawling handwriting. He digested the contents of the note quickly and emotionlessly.

Grixxler looked up again at the baby boy, who hadn’t yet dropped the expression of fearful curiosity. “Well, Micah,” he said with a crooked grin, putting a pointed emphasis on the name, “it looks like I have myself a new shepherd boy.” He stuffed the parchment into his lantern and turned as the cackling flame consumed the morsel. The A brief flood of bright light filled the room. When the light mellowed back into a dull glow, the flame left behind a shrunken, charcoaled fragment that shortly disintegrated. mellowed back into the dull glow. The flame left behind a shrunken, charcoaled fragment that shortly disintegrated. And with that scrap of paper died any chance Micah had at a normal life.

Chapter 1

Years Later and Miles Away . . .

A seagull, pecking at a sandy beach in the early morning twilight, hopped out of the way and took flight as a wintry ocean wave surged up the slope. As though satisfied that it had disposed of the pesky bird, the wave slowed and retired back into the body of water, only to be replaced by another relentless wave rising eagerly up the slope again. Squawking irritably at the tide for interrupting its breakfast, the seagull soared up atop the peak of a nearby red-shingled roof. It was the roof of an inn. The Inn, in fact, as it was called.

The fading, wooden hotel was parked on the corner of Heather Bay, looking out upon the vast Kepled Sea like a lonely maiden waiting for her sailor to sail home. Being so far from any port, or civilization for that matter, one wouldn’t think The Inn would attract enough visitors to stay in business. But travelers seemed to find it at such a time that they were weary from their voyage and ready for a warm bed that didn’t rock and a warm meal or two among new company.

In the late spring and summer, when the surrounding trees were filled out in vibrant greens, and the various songbirds danced and whistled about, the place had a quaint, busy mood. Then visitors would leisurely stroll the stepping stone walkways through the gardens and along the nearby Otter Creek, where the soothing sound of the rippling stream could be heard over the subtle roar of the distant Spring River. But now, in early spring, the dull browns from winter hadn’t yet given way. And the budding life evident in traces of green sprouting from the ground and the tree limbs wasn’t enough to offset the stagnant feel and look of the place.

An abandoned boat yard neighbored The Inn, where various tools and scraps of lumber lay scattered about, rusting and rotting away. Amidst it, like a set of wale ribs, lay the half-finished skeleton of a ship’s hull. Winter had rotted its once fresh color to a shade of brown similar to the one that dominated the surroundings.

On the water immediately past the beach sat a maze of wooden docking. The left side was reserved for 12 identical virgin ships that had been constructed in the nearby boat yard. With cabins designed to house four, these ships were built primarily for agility and maneuverability, according to the haggled old sailors that frequented The Inn.

The right side of the dock was allotted for the ships of The Inn’s visitors. On this chilly morning it was full, which was highly unusual in early spring.

Inside The Inn, Robbyn, the young innkeeper, lay next to the humming woodstove upon the warm cobblestone kitchen floor. As she lay, a few pioneering strands of light peered through the pot-sized kitchen window, and illuminated her long, wavy, copper hair. Wrapped in a wool blanket, she watched the emerging sun through waking, river-pool green eyes.

“Another beautiful morning,” she said aloud, as she had every beautiful morning for the past seven years. Rising to her knees and rubbing the fatigue from her eyes, she completed the second step of her morning routine with a prayer. And then began another long day nearly identical to all the ones before it. Or so she thought.

She grabbed the cream-colored apron from a nearby peg and tied it deftly around her waist. Working with the efficiency and precision that only years of repetition could produce, Robbyn stoked the fire up to a hearty rumble, retrieved an assortment of cast iron pots and pans hanging from the ceiling, and set to work cooking breakfast. The food supplies were running low, she noted. But the supply ship would arrive tomorrow.

Taking a spare moment while she waited for the eggs to cook, Robbyn peeked through the kitchen doorway and into the main room. A few of the guests had already wakened and were groggily seated amongst the wooden tables.

“Good morning!” Robbyn greeted cheerfully, an oil soaked spatula in hand. The room seemed to brighten at her entrance. The guests sat up and each gave her a warm greeting.

She turned back to the kitchen and, beginning to hum, put the leftover coffee on the stove to warm. She grabbed the straw broom and worked her way around the kitchen, pulling the dust out of the crevices. The coffee heated shortly and Robbyn bustled out into the main room, which was now much fuller, with the coffee and platter of mugs in hand.

“Nobody wants any coffee, do they?” She asked the room with a playful grin. This was met with roars of mock disapproval by the seamen.

“I thought not.” Robbyn laughed. She made her way around the table, leaving a steaming mug of coffee at each hand. She had to make two rounds, as each cup was greedily downed behind her.

“Captain Will must be starving you men!” She said as she poured the last cup.

“You have no idea, Robbyn.” One sailor said before disappearing behind his cup.

Have you ever been to sea?” Another asked as his hands hovered over the steam curling from his mug.

“Only once,” Robbyn said before moving on to the other guests. “I definitely prefer dry land.” This launched the sailors into a discussion about the life of a sailor, and its many advantages and disadvantages. She left the main room a livelier place than when she’d entered it. A steady chatter was now rising. That’s more like it, she thought.

The day wore on as usual. Robbyn served breakfast, cleaned the rooms, and prepared the midday meal. Some of the guests filtered out through the day. But at noon most of them were still there, including Captain Will’s sailors. After the meal was served, Robbyn seized the first opportunity of the day to rest. She plopped gratefully into one of few empty chairs in the room, adjacent to Will’s table. The room buzzed with chatter. Talk hovered, as it had for the months, around the infamous Marauder, James Kestrel, and his upcoming execution. Robbyn tuned into a nearby conversation.

“My cousin’s going to his hanging,” bragged a younger man.

“Him and all of Gable Land.” Will laughed.

“What’s this I hear,” Robbyn inquired, “about the Marauders coming out of hiding?”

This caught the attention of the people at Robbyn’s table.

“It’s true,” agreed a plump, finely dressed woman. “We’ve always known they wouldn’t remain dormant forever, and now I think it’s only a matter of days.”

“I don’t think so,” argued an older man with a sparse beard. “After being gone for fourteen years-”

“-Seven,” Will said. “They came out of hiding for one raid, seven years ago.”

The old man frowned. “Are you sure about that?”
Robbyn cut in. “Yes, there was definitely a raid. I distinctly remember it.”

“Fine then.” The old man waved his hands irritably. “After being gone for seven years I think it’s safe to say they’ve left for good. Most likely they’re lounging in paradise on some faraway tropical island.”

“Paradise?” Will snorted. “I’ve gotten into scrapes with the Marauders myself, and so have many of the men here,” he waved his arm toward his nodding crew, “and let me just say this: the Marauders aren’t the pesky, disorganized looters they used to be. Before they disappeared, they’d grown strong in number and discipline. They’re not after riches anymore. They’re after power. As we all know, they had the Caelum Flute shortly before they disappeared. If it was treasure they were after, they could have traded it for all the money they could ever want. But they kept it, tapped its secrets. I think they planned to use it for something terrible.”

“Which is . . .” the older man said, his arms folded and his eyebrows arched skeptically.

“Say what you will,” Will said, “but I think they planned to take over Gable . . . still do.”

Now it was the old man’s turn to snort. “You seem to know a lot about them for an innocent civilian.” Before Will could respond, the old man continued, “Tell me this: Why now? Why would the Marauders attack now and not five years ago, or in the next decade for that matter?

“Because,” the plump woman answered for Will, “James Kestrel’s hanging is next month.”

“You people and your conspiracies,” the old man said. “So now the Marauders are going to break into the castle dungeon as well?”

“Why not?” said a sailor on the other side of Will. “He was their Head Captain and master plotter. Freeing him seems like a good move to me.”

“Not when he’s held in the most secure dungeon in the world,” said the old man. “No visitors, guards round the clock, cells in the tallest tower right in the heart of the greatest castle in the world. There’s a reason no one’s ever escaped from it.”

This was met with a brief silence. Robbyn was about to point out that this was a very good thing when Will spoke again, in a low voice. “It helps when you have seven years to plot.”

“They’ve plotted seven years to free one man? I don’t care if he’s their Head Captain or not. That’s nuts,” a younger man said.

“Not for one man,” Will said, his eyes wide, “for the power to rule the world.”

The young man scowled in confusion.

When nobody explained further, Robbyn leaned toward him and spoke in a quiet voice. “James Kestrel buried the Caelum Flute just before he was captured. He’s the one person who knows where it is.”

Even in the dim light, Robbyn could see a glint appear in the young man’s eyes. A small smile collected at the corner of his mouth.

“You mean,” he said, “this priceless flute is buried somewhere in Gable?”

Robbyn interpreted his faraway gaze all too clearly.

“And thousands are searching for it as we speak,” Will said. He paused, noting the young man’s greedy look. “But the people searching for it are mostly gold diggers, thieves, scammers and gamblers.”

“Nothing but a legend,” the old man grumbled under his breath. Several sailors opened their mouths to object when the room was covered in darkness. The chatter died as people looked around in confusion. Robbyn looked toward the door which had been propped open to let light in. A humongous, bear-like mass now eclipsed the doorway. With a booted step through the threshold, it ducked and entered The Inn.

The light rippled back, revealing a giant man. He stretched up to his full height, his head inches from the wooden beams of the ceiling. He had wild, dark brown hair that grew down into a tangled, rough-cut beard and was tied into a bushy bundle down his back. His rolled up sleeves revealed what looked like matted fur along his arm. But even through the fur the sinewy muscles in his arms could be seen pressing against his sleeves. His clothing looked like various scraps of dark cloth sewn together. The crooked, untidy stitch suggested that he’d fashioned it himself. About his shoulders hung an enormous, dark gray cloak that could have been cut from a sail . . . with a dull knife. His wild, stark blue eyes, nearly lost beneath his overgrown-hedge-like eyebrows, squinted about the silent room as if searching for a threat, before calmly coming back to the table before him.

“Hello, Drift,” Robbyn said, springing from her chair. She willed the people behind her to quit staring and get back to their conversations. But the room remained quiet. “How can I help you?” She asked, offering an inviting smile.

“Could you spare me a room for one night, Robbyn?” he said in a deep rumble of a voice that shook the room.

“Always.” She swung her open hand to lead inside. “Have a seat. Can I get you anything to eat?”

He shook his head. “No, but thanks.” He found a seat in the corner, nodding his bushy head courteously as he sat down.

“Hey, could yeh top me off over here?” called the old man from Robbyn’s table. He raised his mug. As if on cue, the rest of the room trickled slowly back into chatter.

“One moment,” Robbyn said. She flitted into the kitchen, retrieved the pitcher and refilled his mug beside him.

As she poured, his eyes wandered to the white stripping wrapped around her left forearm. “Say, Robbyn,” he said, “have you ever mentioned what’s underneath that bandage you always wear? It can’t be an injury, can it? You’ve worn it for too long.”

Robbyn felt her smile waver, like a candlelight suddenly struck by a breath of air. She stopped pouring and her right hand instinctively closed around her left forearm, around the bandage that hid her darkest secret. All at once, her throat felt dry. With a quick look around at the attentive, curious eyes, she regained her smile.

“A map,” She said. All those watching leaned in collectively in anticipation.

“A map?” The old man raised one eyebrow. “Of what?”

Robbyn waited for effect before responding, still smiling. “That’s between me and James Kestrel.” She said with a wink.

The immediate area, especially the sailors’ table, exploded in hearty roars of laughter. Robbyn turned and left a room still buzzing. But once she entered the kitchen her smile faded. Feeling dizzy, she staggered against the wall, sank to the stone floor, and burst into tears. For several minutes she sat, with her hands covering her face, and let the tears shudder out. When she finished, she wiped her eyes and slowly unraveled the bandage with shaking fingers.

The strip of cloth fell away and revealed a black ink design etched into her skin; an “S” bearing a horizontal rod with a bucket at each end. Countless hours of scrubbing hadn’t done anything to this cursed emblem that would forever mark her as a slave, remind her of her past and cloud her future. Keeping The Inn was supposed to keep her mind off of the terrible situation she was in. But lately it only made matters worse. And more and more frequently Robbyn was taken back to the haunting days of her childhood.

At seven years of age she had been a happy, simple youngster with two parents, living on the coast far to the south of The Inn. But that all changed one windy fall evening when black clad, dagger wielding Marauders ransacked their village, killed her parents, and captured her and other villagers. They were sold into slavery; each of their left forearms inked with the cursed mark. Ryefield Carpenter, the wealthy owner of The Inn who had made his fortune building ships, bought Robbyn and put her to work under Martha, his aging wife.

The years wore by, Martha died of old age, and Robbyn was put in charge of The Inn. Meanwhile Ryefield grew less and less able bodied. Robbyn, over time, grew accustomed to her role and came to think of Ryefield, a kind old man once you got to know him, as more of a father than a master. Ryefield, likewise, came to think of Robbyn as a daughter.

At the arrival of winter, Ryefield dismissed the boat builders, as he did every winter, until spring. Going into The Inn, he refused dinner, only saying, “I’m very tired,” and went upstairs to bed. He passed away in the night, left no will, and had no family that Robbyn knew of. Thus, under the law of Gable, all of Ryefield’s possessions, including The Inn and Robbyn herself, would fall into the possession of the next person to claim them.

Frightened by this prospect, Robbyn told no one of Ryefield’s death. She’d always hidden her mark, which made it easier to keep her secret, if only slightly. So, as a young girl still mourning, Robbyn was left completely alone with no idea what to do.

But the guests kept coming, and Robbyn kept doing what she knew and loved to do; she ran an inn. Busy days were her happiest. She almost completely forgot about her plight on those days. But when The Inn was quiet she was left with no veil between her and the question she had no answer to: How long could her secret remain undiscovered? Worse still were the times when a new guest would ask for the owner. Armed only with an unconvincing, “I’m her,” Robbyn hated the responses that inevitably followed: “You?! But you’re not even a full grown woman! Why, you’re just a girl!”

Ryefield took a yearly trip north during the winter, so nobody had suspected anything yet. But with the temperatures warming fast, people would undoubtedly start asking about him. In late spring the boat builders would be back, searching for work.

Robbyn sighed. She kept trying to convince herself that she was free to go. But she just couldn’t bring herself to leave The Inn. It was her home. What would she do when she left?

Robbyn sighed again, sniffed and rose to her feet. “Have faith.” She said aloud before a silent prayer. She blinked herself back into composure and took a deep breath. Just as she was about to head back out into the main room a commotion erupted from it.


“Grab him!”

A scuffle ensued, followed by three inn-shaking crashes. Robbyn burst through the door to find quite a scene. Drift was holding the old man by the collar high up in the air. The old man’s aghast, white face could be seen between the rafters. His legs swung freely beneath him. The sailors surrounded the two, posed as if ready for a fight. A trail of toppled tables and chairs marked where the chase had occurred.

“Pay the good innkeeper!” Drift growled through bared teeth, glaring up at the man. He shook him slightly, causing his head to bump against one of the rafters.

The old man dove a shaking hand into his pocket and pulled it back out with a collection of coins that jingled to the floor.

Drift lowered him slowly to the ground and he scampered out the door like a freed rabbit as soon as Drift unclenched his massive hand.

“Ungrateful whelp!” one of the sailors called after him.

“He tried to run away without paying,” Will explained upon noticing Robbyn at the kitchen entrance.

Drift bent over and, with difficulty due to his thick fingers, pulled the coins from the floor. “At least he left you a tip,” Drift grunted as he offered his calloused fist. Robbyn held out her cupped hands and received the money.

“Well,” she said, hoping her eyes weren’t red and puffy from her tears, “it’s a good thing I have such good men around. Thank you.”

In truth, The Inn was frequented by such “regulars” who stayed at least once a year, friends of Robbyn’s from previous visits. Robbyn never had to worry about a fight breaking out, or someone taking advantage of her with these people around.

“We’ll take care of this mess,” Will said. The sailors quickly propped up the chairs and tables and mopped up the spilt food.

“And now,” Will said when everything had been set back up, “we must be off.” The sailors formed a line and each gave Robbyn a hug on their way out. She couldn’t suppress a smile at the sheepishness of these haggard, sea tempered men as they stepped forward and wrapped her in their wiry arms. Will was last. “Our stay has been, as always, nothing short of the best.” He said as they embraced. He proffered a sack of coins.

Robbyn accepted the payment. “You guys have a safe voyage.” She said as they filed out the door.

“I’ll be in my ship,” Drift said, his deep, rumbling voice stopping several nearby conversations mid-sentence. He cast an accusing eye around the room before cracking his knotted knuckles. “Let me know if another one breaks for it.”

Robbyn glanced at the other guests, many of them looking at Drift out of the corner of his or her eye. “I really don’t think it’s going to be a problem, Drift.”

Drift grunted, turned and passed back through the door. In his wake, a blanket of shadow was cast over the room and then torn away as he passed through the doorway. He walked up the dock to his ship, The Wooden Swan, a tiny vessel with a sail that wouldn’t have provided enough fabric for his cloak. Oversized oars hung out either side of the boat. Drift planted one booted foot in the boat, sending it veering slightly. As it steadied he placed the other foot in and carefully, steadily balanced his way down into the cramped cabin made smaller by the large amount of space Drift’s body consumed. He eased into his chair, preparing for a long day of studying his charts.

Into the afternoon, the guests gradually filtered out and set sail. The day wore into evening, and Robbyn witnessed the golden orb of the sun dip toward the sea, and rest on the downy bedding of a pink-saturated cloud cluster. As she set to work washing the dishes, she hummed with enthusiasm, feeling much better as a direct result, she was sure, of the hugs from the sailors. She tapped into a rhythm and before long was drying the last dish.

Suddenly, she jolted in surprise. Her song cut off mid-note. The dish in her hand slipped, plunged, and shattered. She sensed something. Robbyn leaned against the washbasin and peered through the window. Something flashed into view and then disappeared-something black. Like a deer alarmed at a snapped twig, she froze, her unblinking eyes trained on the window. She pleaded inwardly for a crow or a blackbird to hop into view. But after several agonizing seconds nothing appeared.

It’s happening all over again, she thought helplessly, her heart now thumping in panic. Fear clogged her mind, blurring her thoughts. Looking down, she saw that her arms were frozen in time, still holding an imaginary plate. She loosened her arms and grabbed the cast iron used to stoke the fire, using both quivering hands to hold it upright. She leaned against the wall beside the doorway, monitoring her breathing and listening to her heart race. She took a deep, shaky breath, and with faltering steps made her cautious way around the corner into the main hall. Long forgotten memories poured freshly and vividly through her mind, burning like reopened scar tissue.

Another swish of black-the trailing edge of a cloak disappeared up the flight of stairs. For a brief moment, perhaps the most terrifying one, Robbyn wondered if she was imagining things. Was she losing her mind? But as she turned the corner all uncertainties were instantly quelled. For bearing over her, with a couple dozen men behind him, stood a smug, black cloaked man. The shine of his golden tooth detracted her attention only momentarily from the shadowy, black eyes that sent a tingling chill down her spine. The cold indifference was striking; it was like looking into the unblinking eyes of a mountain lion. Atop his dark head sat a crooked crown, copiously jeweled with brightly colored gems. Robbyn stood inches away, she knew, from the Marauder King. It was nothing short of a nightmare spilled into the real world.

“Robbyn,” he said playfully. Robbyn’s heart fluttered dangerously. She felt herself plunged into a new level of terror at hearing her name uttered so casually by those evil lips. Something triggered, and the full force of her pent up, anxious energy snapped forth in the form of an upward swinging fire rod. With a resounding clang, the iron made contact. Robbyn gasped, taken aback at what she’d done.

But the swing missed high, and sent The King’s crown sailing across the room. It bounced off the far wall, and rolled slowly before the legion of waiting Marauders, depositing a single red ruby on the wooden floor before their transfixed eyes.

“I-” Robbyn started apologetically, as though she’d just spilled a cup of wine over a guest.

Shaking with outrage, The King’s ring and bracelet covered hands flew to his tangled mess of thin, black hair.

“YOU-INSOLENT-YOU . . .” His words fumbled over one another in their attempt to attack Robbyn. His glittering fingers shot forward, hovering inches from Robbyn’s face. But he stopped short, as though repelled by some invisible force. A twisted grimace contorted his face; an involuntary symptom of the turmoil brewing behind it.

After a few tense moments, the storm broke. The angry waves of his visage smoothed. With a meek jangling of jewelry, his hand fell away, unblocking Robbyn’s view of the Marauder King.

Robbyn let out a breath, but too soon.

The hand shot to Robbyn’s left wrist, closing around the bandage. Robbyn yanked back in reflex, but the hand only ratcheted tighter until she dropped to her knees in pain. With a flick of the wrist, her arm was laid bare. The mark of the slave, now hazed with a red, hand-shaped imprint, was open for others to see for the first time in years. The King looked disappointedly down at Robbyn, as though he’d just uncovered a stash of goods she’d stolen.

“Tie her to that chair!” he ordered, whirling around with a sweeping murderous glance at his crew. The assortment of grizzled, sinewy assassins and thieves widened their eyes in fear-an almost comical spectacle. They flew to his bidding.

“NOW!” he screamed, spittle flying from his mouth, even though the task was nearly complete when he said it. Falling into a rhythm, The King bellowed a string of orders. The mass of black erupted forth in a wave, nimbly obeying his commands, raiding the supplies, filling the ships, and spreading straw. They gave the crown a wide berth, but kept glancing at it out of the corners of their eyes.

The King spoke quietly. “We’re going to burn this place to the ground.” He whirled around, pointing a quivering finger at Robbyn as she was being bound to a chair by thick, seaman’s rope, “and you’re going to burn with it.”

Robbyn took the death sentence wordlessly as mounds of straw were spread around her. She felt distant, as though she were only a spectator to the terrible event happening to her; only the witness of some legend that her guests might argue about in the future. Nothing she did, it seemed, would affect the outcome of what was happening.

She watched The King as he, satisfied that every man was busy, walked casually over to his crown. He snatched up the crown and the loose ruby. A feeling of renewal seemed to pass over The King with the familiar, authoritative headpiece.

As the mountains of straw grew, Robbyn was cut off from the collection of smug-faced, torch-wielding Marauders that surrounded her. The tightly wrapped rope cut into her skin, leaving no room to even wiggle. Reality was beginning to set in. She took a deep breath and exhaled in an attempt to still her pumping heart and stared up at the rough-hewn wooden beams of the ceiling. The last piece of the world left for her to observe, she realized with a pang. She tried to think about the good memories that these beams had witnessed over the years, the friends she’d made and the good news that had been delivered. Despite the panic and fear that her second encounter with the Marauders had evoked, she rummaged through her mind for some way to escape, an endeavor for which the twisting grains of the ceiling, however map-like, offered no enlightenment.

But she continued to study those lines leading to nowhere even as they were obscured by an ever-thickening layer of smoke. A cackling rose to a deafening pitch as the fire greedily dug into the straw. But Robbyn refused to give up hope, despite how frustratingly helpless she felt. She had the insatiable feeling that it wasn’t her time. She one day hoped to meet her Lord in Heaven, but now simply wasn’t the moment. She clung desperately to that fragment of optimism even as the cloud of smoke stung her eyes and throat, harvesting involuntary tears and inducing retches.

Everything around her, even the growing, voracious flames, faded through a veil of gray. Robbyn felt hopelessly trapped. The heat was unbearable, pressing like a vice. The innkeeper painfully looked down and saw fire climbing its way up her apron. Her breath became labored as she inhaled a fresh batch of bitter, staccato smoke. Even as she shut her eyes tight, she could still see the wicked, gluttonous fire. Finally, surrendering herself to her fate, Robbyn prayed to God, and passed out. Her chin fell limply downward.

Outside The Inn, still poring over logs and charts, Drift heard a commotion and was summoned from the numbness of technical thought. Curious, he lifted the lantern from his desk and turned to investigate, but stopped cold. Someone was stealthily boarding his ship. The harsh stench of an assailant filled his nostrils. Clenching his fists, but keeping his back turned, he waited as the intruder crept noiselessly over the deck. Each silent step, however expertly placed, shifted the balance of the ship an almost undetectable amount. Drift felt each subtle vibration like a spider feels a wriggling fly caught in its web. The intruder stopped. The boat steadied. Several seconds passed in complete stillness.

Then, without notice, the cabin door flew open, revealing a dagger-armed Marauder barely visible against the dark night behind him. But Drift was way ahead of him. Before the cabin door even hit the wall, the giant sprang into action. Lifting himself by the short cabin rafters, he crashed down hard, ramming his shoulder into the wall. The Wooden Swan pitched violently, knocking the Marauder off his feet and causing his dagger to sink into the door post. Without a moment’s hesitation, Drift dashed the short distance to his prone foe, navigating the wildly rocking boat with an agility and precision that only years spent at sea could create.

With a massive hand he grabbed the struggling Marauder by the cloak, stepped out into the cool night air and flung him like a spear. The Marauder sailed over an adjacent ship, flailing like a panicked fish, before shattering the water’s surface.

Quickly, Drift surveyed his surroundings. The Inn was on fire, with flames licking out the windows and clouds of smoke pouring into the sky. His survey didn’t make it past that. He didn’t notice the area was crawling with black cloaks as they loaded Ryefield’s ships with supplies from The Inn and patrolled the neighboring woods. Nor did he notice that at the far end of the dock sat The Marauder’s infamous vessel, Lady Midnight, the enormous, black-hulled, black-sailed ship that transported the Marauders to their crimes. He didn’t see that at that moment a cluster of Marauders were loading some sort of contraption from Lady Midnight onto one of Ryefield’s ships.

As soon as he spotted the flames, he breathed one word: “Robbyn.”

Fighting against his every instinct to charge the enemy with swinging fists, Drift racked his brain for some sort of plan. Some incoherent pieces of a strategy came into focus, and he resolved to fill in the foggy areas later.

Jumping to action, Drift tore the dagger from his door post, flooded into his cabin, and grabbed his fire-starting box from the desk. He fumbled with them as he rushed back out into the pale moonlight, resenting his slow, thick fingers. Finally, Drift had the flint, steel, and dried cedar bark in hand. With a downward strike that grinded half the flint away, a shower of sparks ignited the cedar bark. The thin strands of the bark crumbled and smoked, glowing faintly at Drift’s encouraging breaths. Eyeing the growing flame of The Inn anxiously, he ripped a patch from his dark cloak, wrapped the smoking cedar and hurled the package into a nearby ship, the farthest of Reyfield’s from The Inn.

“What’s that?!” a Marauder, the first among several investigating the splash to notice Drift, called from the bank.

“Is that a bear?” a second said, straining to see in the meager light.

“No, it’s a . . . it’s a human!”

“You three, after it!”

The three appointed Marauders drew their daggers and melted into the shadows, their eyes locked on their large target.

Drift didn’t wait for them. With a roar that sounded far from human, he charged The Inn. Careening around the corner of the docks, Drift shoved each of his three pursuers into the water with a meaty forearm, not even slowing down. His rage built with his momentum. Any black cloak that stood in his way as he powered up the beach was flattened. One brave Marauder sped straight toward the stampeding giant, and bounced off him like a skipping stone.

“Seize him! Seize him!” the King cried. But it was too late.

Drift barreled through the smoking inn door at the crest of his momentum. Not bothering to narrow himself, his huge build took a substantial chunk of the surrounding door frame with him. As the broken door fell away before him, flame came rushing at him from around its edges. Surrounded, Drift covered his head and didn’t break stride.

The giant’s legs crunched into what felt like a dining table, and he toppled forward, landing on the floor with an earth-rumbling crash. But he found himself in a world separate from the scrambling Marauders, a world surrounded by fire. He was in area clear of fire, however scorching it felt. The clouds of smoke gnawed at Drift’s eyes as he looked urgently around for Robbyn. But through his watery eyes he could only see flame everywhere.

“Robbyn!” he roared, choking on the insidious smoke.

And there she was: a small, wilted form, with flame closing around her. Her hair looked not unlike the flames that surrounded her and her skin was charred and sodden. With a rush of fury at the evil that could so mercilessly do this to this girl, Drift yanked the Marauder’s dagger from his belt, rushed forward, and sliced through her bonds. He lifted her from the hungry mouth of fire. A few small flames feeding on Robbyn’s clothing were extinguished with the pressing of a massive hand. Robbyn coughed through her unconsciousness.

“She’s alive,” Drift breathed with relief.

With the flame dead, Drift pressed Robbyn’s body to himself and whirled about for his escape. But, surrounded by identical walls of flame, there was no way to discern which way the door was.

With a rumble, a large chunk from the burning rafters dislodged itself and crash-landed at Drift’s feet. The building subsequently leaned several inches from this loss of support.

Sensing his shortness of time, Drift was forced to guess. He steeled himself and thundered in the direction he happened to be pointing at. He closed his eyes, gritted his teeth, and cradled Robbyn in his colossal arms as they breeched the wall of pure inferno. Ignoring the searing pain, his powerful legs pumped, oblivious to whatever they found traction on. A series of dining tables splintered and crunched beneath him. Breaking free, Drift put on a burst of speed. He saw the inn wall in front of him appear milliseconds before he crashed through it in a cascade of burning, fragmented wood. They appeared only feet away from the door Drift had originally entered through. The giant gratefully gulped in the fresh, cool air. Never before had anything tasted so sweet, though it was slightly tainted by the bitter taste of residual smoke.

The Marauders were still scrambling, crowding the doorways a safe distance from the flame to The King’s screamed orders.

“Get in there! Kill him!”

Drift didn’t slow down; he simply lowered his shoulder and kept his legs churning. He shot past the Marauders before they could react to his bursting through the wall. His booted feet thundered back up the dock and Drift leapt into his ship. A shockwave spread from the bobbing boat as Drift cut The Wooden Swan from the dock and unfurled the sail with a slice of the Marauder’s dagger. He set Robbyn gently on the deck. Seeing her frail, sooty face summoned a new gush of energy.

He leapt into his rowing seat, stashed the knife in his belt, and grabbed the two familiar handles. The sinew in his arms bulged as he heaved on the paddles, separating The Wooden Swan from the dock. In the darkness he could just make out his pursuers pouring into two of Ryefield’s ships. Drift heaved again on the oars, spurting the ship seaward, feeding on the momentum of the first heave.

“Bring them back dead!” the King wailed. “Your heads are on the line! All of you!”

The Marauders had the ship in motion, and were navigating the maze of docks. Drift cast a backward glance. Nothing stood between him and the Ocean. The Wooden Swan slowly distanced itself from the imminent Marauder ships as Drift’s gigantic arms fell into a rhythm, carving away at the water.

A cool breeze wafted over the perspiration already collecting on his skin and filled the sail, lending The Wooden Swan extra power, but lending the larger sail of his pursuers more. He dug harder, grunting with each pull.

The Inn was shrinking fast, the Marauder ship more slowly.

Hot and sweat-soaked, Drift somehow reached into himself and found the power to pull harder. The guttural noises grew louder with the effort. The Inn was steadily growing brighter, outlining the pursuing ship sharply.

As soon as those ships were a satisfactory distance behind, Drift dropped the oars. He sprang to his feet and lashed the wheel in place. With a final backward glance at their hunters, he gathered Robbyn in his arms and crossed to the opposite side of his ship where they were hidden from view by his cabin. As noiselessly as his frame would allow, he slipped over the edge and plunged into the sea.

Totally submerged, the cool water felt soothing around his hot, sweaty body for an instant. Then the water turned frigid, stiffening his muscles. Ignoring this sensation, Drift squeezed Robbyn to himself and kicked hard for The Inn, hovering a safe distance below the surface to avoid detection. Tensely, he waited for the ships to pass, itching to take Robbyn to the surface. He could almost feel the water pouring into her lungs. The wait seemed to go on forever, and Drift nearly decided to bring her to the surface regardless of whether the Marauders would see them or not.

Then the hull of a ship glided over him, its ridge missing him by inches. As it rode over them, they were pulled backward by its wake.

Scrambling furiously to break free, Drift powered for the surface. Upon breaching the sky he held Robbyn’s head above the surface for several moments as the water came spluttering out. Then he remembered to take a breath himself. Once her coughing stopped and his cavernous lungs had been filled, he flipped over onto his back, holding Robbyn to his stomach, and doggedly backstroked for shore. He watched as the ships continued their pursuit of the unmanned vessel, completely fooled.

Within minutes he was dragging himself and Robbyn up the sandy beach in a shower of salt water and sand. They were adjacent to The Inn, which now had angry flames pouring from every window, releasing thick billows of smoke into the night sky. The bold, shimmering light that shot from the mass of flame cast long, animated shadows past every, rock, plant, and toiling Marauder. The King was standing only feet from the flame, arms spread wide and eyes closed peacefully, a satisfied grin on his face, as if he were enjoying a refreshing spring breeze.

From the shadows, Drift shot a glance at the ship he’d set fire to on the far side of The Inn. Smoke was snaking up unnoticed from the cabin windows, but there was no visible flame.

“Come on!” Drift breathed.

The giant crept through the undergrowth noiselessly. At the edge of his cover he crouched and waited, his muscles ready to spring, with Robbyn cradled in his arms.

BANG! An earsplitting explosion rocked the beach. A menacing rumble followed, like a roll of thunder. Everyone whipped around to see the ship farthest from The Inn fully ablaze; a miniature version of The Inn itself. The fire was eating at the sails of two neighboring ships as well.

“Put it out!” screamed The King. “You pelicans! Put it out!” The Marauders scrambled for a means of dousing the flame.

Drift sprinted behind a series of turned backs unnoticed.

But time was short now. The burning ship could only hold their attention for so long.

Not slowing, he tip-toed up the dock with long, bounding strides, as if he were clearing several hurdles with each step. He risked a brief glance that revealed the Marauders were still distracted by the burning ship. A ring of them were scooping buckets of water on as The King cursed and harassed everyone in sight. Just as Drift and Robbyn disappeared behind the black hull of Lady Midnight, The Inn collapsed into a broken, smoldering pile, sending up a shower of red ash and embers. This drew the attention of a few of the Marauders, including The King, but they quickly returned their focus to the burning ship.

Drift crept around the giant hull of the black ship. Somehow the shadow it cast seemed darker than it should have been. And as Drift passed into this darkness, an unsettling feeling washed over him. Robbyn, though still unconscious, shivered.

But within this shadow sat their escape: one of Ryefield’s ships. Drift boarded the deck of the generic vessel, opened the cabin door and placed Robbyn gently in the hammock. He then slashed the rope binding the ship to the dock and unfurled the sail. As the vessel lurched forward, Drift steered the wheel away from open sea. Using Lady Midnight to hide their getaway from the Marauders, he hugged the shoreline until they faded to safety, The Inn nothing but a shrinking bright streak on the dark horizon.

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Joraiem said...

Cool book, I really hope to read it and it is really cool that my story is about a shepherd, I am guessing like yours!!

Hannah said...

Thanks for your comment and for following my blog.

Good beginning, the prologue makes the reader want to keep reading, which I would have, if I didn't have to go get ready for a sleepover for my youth group.


PS That's really cool about your book, that you finished it. My friend, Bekah, finished her book about two months ago. I'm in writing mine right now, and its only 18,000 words. I started mine on the last day of January.

Good luck with finding a publisher!

Araken said...

Nice work! I hope you can get it published; we need more GOOD Christian literature out there. May I, however, offer some suggestions?

I need to start writing consistently.

Robert Treskillard said...


I read the prologue, but have to get to dinner... so chapter 1 will have to wait.

Great start!!


J.R. Parker said...

Thanks for the encouragement everyone.

Hannah: 18,000 words in three months is great. Keep at it. I made the mistake of stopping progress for sometimes even months at a time.

Araken: I crave input. Leave as many suggestions as you want, either as a comment on this blog or to my e-mail address in the sidebar.

R.P.H said...

Wow... that was wonderful! You have left me craving for more(: You had me worried about Robbyn for a while(lol) she’s a lovable character btw. Keep up the awesome work and I can’t wait for more.

Thanks for leaving a comment on my blog and if you don’t mind me asking, “How did you find my blog?” I noticed that we like some of the same authors such as the great Christopher Hopper and Wayne Thomas Batson.

Bye For Now,

J.R. Parker said...

Ryan: I'm glad you liked the excerpt. And I'm pretty sure I found your blog by following the link when you left a comment on Wayne Thomas Batson's blog. Either that or through the CSFF Blog Tour.

The Quest for Truth Books said...

Wow this is amazing and inspirational to those of us who dabble in writing. You clearly created marvelous images in my mind, as well as a compelling desire to read on. Keep going! When will this be ready for sale? Do you need any one to help with pre-editing?

Leighton said...


That is so Cool!
How many drafts?

Keep it up,


Araken said...

I'm just going to go through the prologue. Here's what I think would help:

So when Ganthorn is running, he knows that he isn't alone. However, we never see what he's running from. You've described him as a cold-hearted murderer. What would make him so panicked as to flee through the night?

Perhaps what you could do is this: either have Ganthorn see his enemy from a distance during a lightning burst, or maybe have his imagination run wild. He could look to the crest of a hill while the lightning illuminates the sky and think he's seeing his pursuer, though in reality it's but a rock or tree. This way, you don't have to have the assailant actually show up, but it will give the reader some kind of image of what terror Ganthorn is fleeing from.

When Ganthorn sees his reflection in the lake, I think I would add that his image rippled, disturbed by his stumbling.

Plus, you use words like 'plead' and 'panic'. And then you describe Ganthorn as a cold-hearted killer. It is somewhat disorienting. Perhaps you could change it to 'the normally cold-hearted...' or 'the once cold-hearted...'

Otherwise, you are very good at describing, and you use strong verbs.

Sorry I can't be of more help, but I'm running short on time and I'm not very good at editing manuscripts written in omnipotent narrative.

R.P.H said...

Hey'a J.R.Parker, thanks for telling me (: I really appreciate it. And I can't wait for more of your book.It's pretty cool to have a sneak peak of it.

Bye For Now,

The Quest for Truth Books said...

I read this again and wow... Can we read more and when?

J.R. Parker said...

Quest for Truth: I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's hard to say when it would be available for sale. First I need to get an agent, and part of that is networking, which is one reason I started this blog. After that there's the matter of signing with a publisher and the publishing process, which is long from what I gather. So it just depends... Also, I don't think I will post any more of the book. I'm sorry but I can't give it away! :P But I will be posting about other things, including my progress toward publication.

Leighton: I was pretty sporadic about my editing, but I would estimate maybe the equivalent of five drafts. I'm still waiting on some editing from some people that live near me.

Araken: Thank you very much! I totally agree with all of your suggestions and will promptly write them into the prologue. The only point of yours that I disagree with is that you're not very good at editing manuscripts written in omnipotent narrative. Those are some high-quality observations and I really appreciate them. If you ever do get the time I would definitely welcome your thoughts on chapter one.

Darian Wilmot Stowell said...

Just reading the first few paragraphs, I am wowed. The three qualities I judge a story on are how well I can see it in my head, the use of writing techniques, and the plot. I think this has all 3. In so many other books, my main annoyance is when the author takes up 1 or 2 pages describing the setting, instead of describing it throughout that part of the narrative. Good luck with your book, and may I ask, how long is it? If it is short enough, a literary magazine called Bateau Press has an annual chapbook contest. For a small fee you could enter your storuy. But I am guessing your that it is more of a novel than a novella.

Darian Wilmot Stowell said...

One quick thing I forget. When writing, what medium do you use? I myself like to write my stories in Moleskine notebooks, and then copy them onto my computer. I enjoy horror and fantasy/action.
P.S. Here is a link to my blog. Enjoy.

J.R. Parker said...


Thanks for your kind comments. My book, at this point, is about 72,000 words long. It reached roughly 85,000 before I cut a bunch out. So, yeah, I don't think that magazine contest would work out, but thanks for telling me about it.

I hear of other writers who prefer writing in longhand a lot. But personally I write exclusively on Microsoft Word. When I'm in an inspiration-seeking state of mind I'll often carry a little notebook. But I've found that whenever I try to write anything of length my thoughts come way faster than I can write them and I lose my train of thought. Okay, I'll head over and check out your blog now.

Rivers Daughter said...

Hi, I got the name of your blog from your Mom last night at the graduation. Which I might add, I enjoyed a lot, your speech was very clear and well done, good job. And the book you are writing looks interesting, I would agree with your Dad that it rivals J.K Rowling any day (I don't actually like her books)and I find the thought of knowing (slightly) a up and coming author rather exciting. I look forward to reading the entire work one day, and would offer myself as proof reader IF you need them :). Liesl

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